Jedi Vs Sith

It was just some other normal day on the Death Star. Then, Darth Vader saw that hundreds of Jedi ships approached the almight Death star. The powerful Sith warrior whispered to himself, "Foolish Jedi warriors." Another Jedi warrior ran at Darth Vader and asked him, "What do we have to do?!" Darth Vader said clamly, " Let them come, and when they are close enough, crush them." Everyone that was under Darth Vader did so.

There was a huge fight on the Death Star as Storm Troopers came from everywhere. Blood was shed all over the Death Star. A Jedi warrior jumped at Darth Vader. The Sith warrior grabbed his red lightsaber and said, "After this battle, you will see what death is like." The Jedi grabbed a green light saber and said, "Give up, Darth Vader. We are attacking your 'base' with millions of storm troopers." Darth Vader replied, "You may be more in number, but we are probably ten fold higher in power." The Jedi said back at this, "Stop bluffing!"

So, the battles raged on. Darth Vader raced at the Jedi warrior and tried to stab him straight through the gut. The Jedi warrior quickly parried the attack with his lightsaber. Darth Vader did a kick to the Jed's face, sending him in a wall. The Jedi warrior was actually send through the wall. Darth Vader and the Jedi warrior entered a gigantic room full of Jei ships. Darth Vader lifted a ship with the forse and threw it at the Jedi warrior with full power. A great explosion emerged and the warrior died. Darth Vader walked out of the room. He was right at the back of a Storm Trooper. Darth Vader stabbed the Storm Trooper to the head, killing him.

The battles went on day and night, but in then end the Sith were victorius. Without a single scratch, Darth Vader took his watch to see if there would come more reinforcements. And before Darth Vader knew it, there were even more Storm Troopers. There was one Storm Trooper in the lead that had a big shiny badge. Darth Vader said to the Storm trooper, " I challenge you to a match till the death."

(Not done)

(Continued)
The Elite started shooting with a blaster at Darth Vader. The powerful Sith deflected all of the blasts with his light saber. Darth Vader then quickly went for the Storm Trooper's neck, slowly squishing it till the Storm Trooper's eyes turned to the back of his head. Darth Vader threw the pathetic Trooper to the side and slashed another Storm Trooper's arm off.

The Jedi were losing by great numbers, until they finally fled. Silence was all over the Death Star. Everyone was too tired to fight back now, all they wanted to do is sleep. Darth Vader oly stayed awake. A burning feeling inside of him told him that he had to remain awake. Hours passed, nothing happened. Until then, out of nowhere there was a big explosion. A planet that looked like Coruscant had appeared right in front of te Death Star. Darth Vader didn't have time to tell anyone, so he went to explore all by himself.

In his small space ship, he went to the unkown planet. On the planet he found many weird looking creature that reacted very hostile towads him. So Darth Vader had to slash and stab his way through this situation. He then came at a large building that stood high above everything else. Something told the Sith warrior to proceed. So he did. A small, fat alien walked at Darth Vader and screamed into some kind of weird language, "Bobba blo blo!! Bobba blo blo!!" THe alien then grabbed a dagger and ran towards Darth Vader. Before the alien coud do anything, Darth Vader stabbed him through the head. Green goo came out of the alien's head.

Darth Vader proceeded up the stairs and saw a giant generator. A Sith warrior that Darth Vader had known for some time know appeared in front of the generator. Darth Vader said, "Explain what yourslef!" The Sith said in a crazy tone, "I am going to destroy the Death Star and start my own group of super warriors that will take over the galaxy. All of you have denied my strength, but now it is time for me to stand up!" Darth Vader exclaimed, "This is madness!!" The Sith replied, "Madness? This is no madness! This is New Death Star!!" The Sith threw another smaller generator at Darth Vader. Darth Vader slashed through the object ad did an aimed slash at the Sith's right arm. The Sith jumped back and dodged the attack.

The Sith then grabbed a golden lightsaber and did a light saber throw at Dart Vader. Darth Vader dodged the attack and ifted up the giant generator. Darth Vader then exclaimed, "This end now!!" With the last of his force, Darth Vader threw the generator right into the Sith warrior. The generator exploded and the Sith died. The planet then started crumbling apart. Darth Vader quickly went to his ship and wnet back to the Death star.

(The end)

I think this is really good, but someone please correct me if i am wrong.

x7 for the two combined and -2 alligemnt

Hellzone. Dont be so generous. To start, storm troopers were on Vaders side, not the jedi's. Your words didnt 'flow'. Make them run together. You made it sound so flat and sharp. Make sure you know what you're talking about suchas with the troopers. Im not trying to be mean but just saying you get this much ect doesnt help you to improve. Another thing, make the battles more interesting. When someone died all you did was say 'blank' died. or the 'blank' died.

I give you x4 for length and the fact that you tried. Disregard hellzones post.

you also get -1 alignment. You did really do anything to ruthless. Most the time you were fighting for you life and so had no choice